An Introduction (finally!)

I had trouble writing my intro, so I decided to write and plan my body paragraphs first. Here it is. Any problems I had with it, I wrote in brackets. Help please?



According to Building Suburbia, between 1994 and 2002, real estate developers created about 1.5 million housing units in planned communities per year (Hayden 3). These suburbs, however, are hardly a recent phenomenon. For almost two hundred years, Americans have sprawled into the outskirts of cities, idealizing the suburbs and planned communities with their spacious houses and generous yards. Although some criticize the homogeneity and poor land use of these communities, the majority of America does not heed this particular criticism because more people live in the suburbs than rural and urban areas combined (Hayden xi). [Trans into thesis] Planned communities have become the American Ideal because of safety and because they embody [different adjective?] the American Dream. [too much repetition?]